Script: DARK BAY FOUR (1 of 6)

The start of another episode ...

There will soon be a website where completed strips can be read sequentially, but I'll continue to post scripts on the blog.

This episode reveals he true geekiness of 'Pukey' (a.k.a. Neil).

Page ONE

1/1 TITLE frame, large view of the bay from above.
Annie McInnes (off): Sorry, Sal ... My father was never one for keeping records ...

1/2
Annie: He was a Doctor, not a file clerk.
Neil: Ha ha! That's just like Star Trek.

1/3
Sal: What?
Neil: It's something Doc McCoy might say.

To be continued ...

Sorry for the delay ... Please remain seated.

School holidays and illnesses have delayed production of finished pages, but not the writing of various projects. So while I have nothing to post at the moment there is plenty of new material coming soon.

I'm also working on a website which will contain the strips in a more reader-friendly format where you can read sequentially, rather than in reverse order as on a blog.

So remain seated. A steward will be along shortly with complimentary tea or coffee and tasteless biscuits.

Teaser: Character Development

More Dark Bay soon ...

But in the meantime, here's a teaser for the next almost comic, coming soon (click the pic to make it bigger).

It's a D&D / roleplaying comedy done loosely as an Arrested Development parody. So far there are five scripts (all six pages long, plus title page) done, and more on the way. The plot (yes, there is one) gets convoluted rather quickly, and involves inter-species marriage, a dead Illusionist, and human sacrifice.

This is a made-for-toys production.

Script: DARK BAY THREE (page 6 of 6)

The final page of part three. More soon.

Also something new on it's way, and maybe a new website as well.

Page SIX

Bernie: Well, not openly. Not back then.
Sal: Stu was sure Sunchild was with Mickey Fresno.

Bernie: Mickey always liked to have pretty girls on his arm. Image was everything.

Bernie: No-one but Mickey touched the car though. No way she slept in his car.

Sal: Who fixed you up that night? After you were stabbed.

Bernie: Doc McInnes. He was the town doctor back when The Bay had one.

Bernie: His daughter's still a local. Annie.

Change of scene, to Annie McInnes' house.
Sal: Sorry to bother you Annie, but do you remember the night Bernie Fenton was treated for a stab wound?

Annie: Oh, I'll never forget that night ...

Annie: ... that was the night Lyall Hobson died of a heart attack.

Continued soon ...

Script: DARK BAY THREE (page 5 of 6)

Cow!

Page FIVE
Back on Bernie's farm.

Bernie: Back so soon, Sal?
Sal: The girl who stabbed you called herself Sunchild. She was with Mickey Fresno.

Bernie: Mickey Frenso. There's a blast from the past!

His real name was Mike Smith, but me wanted to south American.

He drove his Roller into a tree in '87. Stockmarket Crash ruined him.

He loved that car. Used to sleep in it back in '68.

Sal: Was Sunchild sleeping with him?
Bernie: No way ...

Mickey wasn't into girls?
Sal: He was gay?

Continued tomorrow ...

Script: DARK BAY THREE (page 4 of 6)

This was a page that didn't have a script written in advance. When I was editing the other pages from my initial draft this episode was reworked until there was an empty page. So I rewrote the previous page and added this one in to give Pukey/Neil something to say (he was being too quiet), and to create some tension between our two police-people.

So below is a fake script done after the fact, for the sake of completeness ...

Page FOUR

4/1
Leaving Stu's house heading to the police car.
Neil: Um, Ma'am?
Sal: Yes, Pukey.

4/2
Neil: There's a LOT of cannabis in that house.
Sal: Is there really?

4/3
Sal: You sure it wasn't Oregano? Stu does a lot of cooking.

4/4
Neil: Um, I don't think ... well, ... maybe?

4/5
They get into the police car.

4/6
Neil: Should we check ... or something?

4/7
Sal explaining how the world works.
Sal: Stu's a good bloke. He doesn't sell to youngsters and doesn't get violent.

4/8
Sal: ... and we wouldn't want the local oregano business falling into gthe wrong hands, would we?
Neil: Um, I guess.

Continued tomorrow ...

Script: DARK BAY THREE (page 3 of 6)

The apple in the background is a Beados brand piece of art by my wee girl. You assemble little dots of colour into shapes and stick them together using water. Then you find small beads of colour everywhere for the next week and try to stop the one-year old boy eating them. A fun game for all the family.

I was pleased to find some Playmobil kitchen scales and some leafy greenery for this page. Stu is a pirate Playombil with a few alterations, but somehow that seemed to work as a hippie drug dealer. Stu even has a cinder-block bookcase just like the one I had when I was a student, and the obligatory stolen road sign to show contempt for authority.

Page THREE

At the house of Stu, the local soft drugs dealer. Stu is fairly harmless, if a little old. Neil wanders around noting all the illegal substances, while Stu and Sal talk about the old days.

3/1
Stu: Yeah. I remember that concert. Old Bernie was in one of the bands.
Sal: So I hear.

3/2
He was good too. Although not that day.

3/3
Stu: Rain really came in. We all just went home.
Sal: Do you remember a girl there who was into suns?

3/4
Stu: Oh, yeah, do I ever ... She was crazy hot. Whacked out on Love and Peace and stuff.

3/5
Sal: Any idea what her real name was?
Stu: Not sure. She just called herself Sunchild. She was staying with Mickey Fresno. He was the agent for the bands.

3/6
Sal: Thanks, Stu.
Stu: No problem.

Continued tomorrow ...